Your Beautiful Green Eyes Ruined Me

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Your Beautiful Green Eyes Ruined Me

Post by kisukeFan_4337 on Thu Sep 01, 2011 10:51 am

Well, not me, but the guy in this story. Who sounds like Neo.
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+-You Have Nice Eyes-+
+-You Have Nice Eyes 2-+
+-You Have Nice Eyes 3-+
+-You Have Nice Eyes 4-+
+-You Have Nice Eyes 5-+

Now, finally:
I'm going to take the bitchy approach. If you like it, okay. If you don't, I don't want to hear your bitching. Suck it up if you don't like it. If you have suggestions that aren't shitty, or anything like that, I'll listen.
I know this is a pretty fucked up story. But I still like it.
(It's not over yet, either.)

Special Thanks to Neo and Harley for the first installment.

And seriously, if you don't like it and have nothing helpful to say...fucking go fuck off.
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Re: Your Beautiful Green Eyes Ruined Me

Post by HarleyThomas on Thu Sep 01, 2011 12:50 pm

What the shit is this fuck?
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Post by kisukeFan_4337 on Thu Sep 01, 2011 2:32 pm

Lunch breaks leave you grumpy, eh?
And you obviously did not read it, Harley.
...Didja?
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Post by HarleyThomas on Thu Sep 01, 2011 3:37 pm

I read it. Now answer the question.
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Re: Your Beautiful Green Eyes Ruined Me

Post by kisukeFan_4337 on Thu Sep 01, 2011 3:42 pm

What do you want to know? It's a story told through dialogue. The first few lines in italics are the male's comments to the reader.
It's a story about a guy who hates this bitchy girl, except he likes her eyes.
...Well, they both kind of hate each other.
That's all I can come up with as an explanation, given the situation I am currently in.
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Re: Your Beautiful Green Eyes Ruined Me

Post by Neo Bahamut on Fri Sep 02, 2011 10:15 am

I sometimes say that Ashley has horse teeth. For some odd reason, Kisukefan appears to be obsessed with her.

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Post by kisukeFan_4337 on Fri Sep 02, 2011 12:29 pm

I never knew that. I just took your quotes and made something a bit longer out of them.
And the horse-toothed bitch in this is getting braces soon.
Unless somebody wants me to change that.
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Re: Your Beautiful Green Eyes Ruined Me

Post by HarleyThomas on Fri Sep 02, 2011 12:32 pm

What a surprising turn of events.
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Post by kisukeFan_4337 on Fri Sep 02, 2011 12:46 pm

Do you have a nice plot twist that might help? I was thinking the male rip her eyes out or something, but that would be terrible.
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Re: Your Beautiful Green Eyes Ruined Me

Post by HarleyThomas on Fri Sep 02, 2011 12:48 pm

Rocks fall, everyone dies.
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Re: Your Beautiful Green Eyes Ruined Me

Post by kisukeFan_4337 on Fri Sep 02, 2011 12:51 pm

Wonderful. That can happen in the last installment. Which is a bit far...
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Re: Your Beautiful Green Eyes Ruined Me

Post by Seraph on Fri Sep 02, 2011 12:56 pm

Nice boat.
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Post by kisukeFan_4337 on Fri Sep 02, 2011 1:17 pm

A boat? I guess I could throw that in.
But then...I now have more problems...
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Re: Your Beautiful Green Eyes Ruined Me

Post by Seraph on Fri Sep 02, 2011 1:18 pm

Its a School Days reference.
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Post by kisukeFan_4337 on Fri Sep 02, 2011 1:20 pm

Oh...but still, it gave me an idea.
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Re: Your Beautiful Green Eyes Ruined Me

Post by Seraph on Fri Sep 02, 2011 1:31 pm

You know, cause School Days is kinda fucked up like that.
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Post by kisukeFan_4337 on Fri Sep 02, 2011 2:14 pm

It's been a while since I've watched it...
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Re: Your Beautiful Green Eyes Ruined Me

Post by Neo Bahamut on Fri Sep 02, 2011 2:41 pm

What this story needs is more Senthose.

He made that last story of yours I read so much better.

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Re: Your Beautiful Green Eyes Ruined Me

Post by kisukeFan_4337 on Fri Sep 02, 2011 3:07 pm

+-You Have Nice Eyes 5: Slightly Modified Edition-+

I have pretty eyes? The bitch is becoming bitchier. Next she'll give me a twenty dollar bill and ask me to fuck her.

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"Where's my twenty dollar bill?"
"I never promised you one, so go fuck off. I'm trying to do this trigonometry shit."
"...You whore."
"What the hell?"
"I don't fuck bitches."
"Okay?"
"Especially the horse toothed variety."
"Fuck off already, dammit."
"Whatever. Damn ugly bitch..."
"Let's go to Penistown."
"Shut the fuck up. Where the hell did you come from all of a sudden anyway?"
*"Blue eyed male's" head explodes for some unknown reason. I say Senthose did something there.*
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Re: Your Beautiful Green Eyes Ruined Me

Post by Neo Bahamut on Fri Sep 02, 2011 6:34 pm

I'd like to say it's a look into the declining sanity of the male character, but it's probably just bad writing.

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Re: Your Beautiful Green Eyes Ruined Me

Post by kisukeFan_4337 on Fri Sep 02, 2011 7:32 pm

No, the male is actually going insane. I've written more, if anyone wants to read.
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Re: Your Beautiful Green Eyes Ruined Me

Post by HarleyThomas on Fri Sep 02, 2011 7:56 pm

We don't.
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Re: Your Beautiful Green Eyes Ruined Me

Post by kisukeFan_4337 on Fri Sep 02, 2011 9:05 pm

Too bad.

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